Some people believe that children are given too much free time. They fel that this time should be used to do more school work. How do you think children should spend their free time?

A portion of people

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towards

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opinion that children are provided with too much

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leisure

time. They feel

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time should be utilized for doing more school work. In my

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perspective

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the free time should be used for doing

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activities. In

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essay

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we will be discussing

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can be done and

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their benefits

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, why it is important

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In the light of the above, I would like to continue and

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what all activities can be done once

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are done with

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homework. I will

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Sentence 3 - Thesis
Sentence 4 - Outline sentence

Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph

Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
Sentence 2 - Example
Sentence 3 - Discussion
Sentence 4 - Conclusion

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Overall Band Score

Coherence and Cohesion: 5.0

Logical structure

Introduction & conclusion present

Supported main points

Accurate linking words

Variety in linking words

Lexical resource: 4.0

Varied vocabulary

Accurate spelling & word formation

Grammatical Range: 4.0

Mix of complex & simple sentences

Clear and correct grammar

Task Achievement: 5.0

Complete response

Clear & comprehensive ideas

Relevant & specific examples

Appropriate word count

4 paragraphs

246 words

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Topic Vocabulary:

Leisure activities
Physical health
Social skills
Creativity
Cognitive development
Emotional intelligence
Academic progress
Balance
Mental health
Personal growth
Teamwork
Strategic thinking
Self-expression
Problem-solving skills
Communication skills

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