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Writing Samples
Band 3

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books becuse they will be able to read everything they want online without paying To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statment?

The insane development of
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 is huge.
While
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 continues to develop more and more in future reductions
newspapers
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 and
books
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 will be
increasingly
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. I believe that there are plenty of people
prefer
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who prefer
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newspapers
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 rather than the
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internet
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 maybe because it's much easier and more efficient.
Furthermore
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,
books
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cant
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 be replaced by
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internet
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books
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. One reason why
newspapers
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 in future will not be printed
because
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is because
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majority
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the majority
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agreed
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 that using
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 is more significant than using
newspapers
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.
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, if you're working on
project
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a project
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 you
cant
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can't
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 because of the lack of
the
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information.
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Also
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books
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, society
cant
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can't
 dispense
books
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 many people
loves
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 the smell of
the
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apply
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books
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 and paper.
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, research shows that more than 60% of people who
reads
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read
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books
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 prefer
real-
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real books
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books
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 rather than
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,
also
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 because
that
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they can understand easily.
Moreover
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, we can't admit that
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the Internet
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 isn't beneficial or useful for students
or
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slangs
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. You can bye any book you want
with
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much
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 cheaper price than
book
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 store.
Thats
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open
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 new paths for those who want to learn but
they
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dont
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don't
 want to bye high price
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. In my
view
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view,
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 governments have to make more book reading associations at a lower price and put a strict regulation for those who sell
books
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with
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 high prices. In conclusion, everyone
have
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 their own vision and the way that they love to read or study or maybe work. The most important thing is reading by any means

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure your ideas follow a clear order. Each paragraph should have a main idea that connects back to your main point.
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Use more specific examples to support your ideas. For each point, add details to explain why you believe it.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar to avoid mistakes. This will help your writing to be clearer.
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You have a clear opinion on the topic, showing what you believe about the future of reading.
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You included reasons why people still value printed books, which adds depth to your argument.

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    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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