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The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant (HA)

The graph shows the number of people taking part in 4 kinds of sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant (HA)
The line chart provides key information about the
number
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 of
people
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 taking part in badminton,
basketball
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,
tennis
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, and
rugby
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 sports in a particular region between 1985 and 2005. The units are measured in the
number
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 of
people
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.
Overall
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, it is clear from the graph that there were many
people
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 who preferred
rugby
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 sports 1n 1985 and 1990.
Tennis
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 was the second most preferred throughout the interval of 1985 to 1990. After that,
rugby
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 and
tennis
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 had the same
number
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 of
people
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 playing in 1995.
Then
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, there was a gradual decrease in the
number
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 of
people
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 who played
rugby
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,
whereas
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 the
number
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 of those who enjoyed playing
tennis
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 saw a slight increase.
According to
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 what is shown, There was a similar
number
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 of
people
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 who played badminton in the years ranging from 1975 to 2005. Individuals who played
basketball
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 in 1985, reached 50
people
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.
Then
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, there was a slight decrease in the
number
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 of
people
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 playing
basketball
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 less than 50 players. Following that, the
number
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 of
people
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 playing
basketball
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 remained stable between 1995 to 2005.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 73%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, people, basketball, tennis, rugby with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 8 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "slight" was used 2 times.
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