Some people are of the opinion that we must discontinue using fossil fuels and adopt renewable sources of energy. Yet others feel that renewable sources of energy are not as dependable as fossil fuels. Discuss both views.

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emerging demand for renewable
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has prompted the debate about whether renewable
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are reliable and
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can completely eradicate fossil
fuels
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.
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it cannot be denied that
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we can fully transform to renewable
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like electric, solar and wind but still, it does
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more benefits
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as reducing environmental concerns and global warming.
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with, critics may argue that since there is a lack of technological advancement in
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sector
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, it is true that we can't fully depend on them.
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infrastructure needed for them is still not
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.
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, getting an electric car itself is costlier these days, on top of it there are not
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e-stations to charge them for longer run.
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, renewable
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can help in combating major environmental degradation and
climate changing
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issues. It cannot be overlooked that it will help us reduce pollution which will
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cause
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health issues, increasing the
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longevity
of individuals.
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, the extraction of fossil
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causes deforestation and habitat destruction.
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, eradicating global warming will help deal with climatic conditions and maintain the environmental balance. In conclusion, in
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recent
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we can adopt a balanced approach or a hybrid model where
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amount of fossil
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are used.
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, hybrid cars where oil is only used in case of emergency or in need.
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government
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needs to have stricter policies like high taxes on fuel and should invest more
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renewable infrastructure and its
advacements
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advancements
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. In the end, once we are fully
equipt
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equipped
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we can transition completely from using fossil
fuels
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to renewable sources of energy.

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The introduction is clear, but it could be stronger by clearly stating your opinion.
coherence cohesion
Make sure each paragraph has a clear main idea and supporting details.
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Try to use more specific examples to support your points.
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Your essay addresses both views on fossil fuels and renewable energy.
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You mentioned the importance of environmental concerns and global warming.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

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...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

Topic Vocabulary:
  • Fossil fuels
  • Renewable energy
  • Sustainability
  • Carbon footprint
  • Greenhouse gas emissions
  • Intermittent energy supply
  • Energy storage
  • Infrastructure
  • Climate change mitigation
  • Depletion of natural resources
  • Energy efficiency
  • Technological advancements
  • Cleaner alternative
  • Energy supply stability
  • Investment in infrastructure
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