(Bar Chart) The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day

(Bar Chart) The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day
IELTS Writing Task Chart for (Bar Chart) The first chart below shows the percentages of women and men in a country involved in some kinds of home tasks (cooking, cleaning, pet caring and repairing the house). The second chart shows the amount of time each gender spent on each task per day
These bar charts illustrate the
percentage
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of males and
females
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in specific
country
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countries
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engaged in different
kinfs
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kinds
of housework.
Overall
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, cooking and cleaning are the most
doing
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done
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home tasks
in
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by
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both genders.
However
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, pet care and
reparing
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repairing
preparing
are the lowest in
percentage
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in these two bar charts. Cooking and cleaning
are
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have
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the highest
percentage
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in both charts. Around 85 % of women
are making
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make
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food with
average
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an average
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time of
hour
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an hour
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and
half
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a half
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,
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however
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however,
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60 % of men tend to cook
with
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apply
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an
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in
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exact
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exactly
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one hour.
Furthermore
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, cleaning ranked the sconed task with
an
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apply
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approximately 60%
females
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. They spend almost 70 minutes
in
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on
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this
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task,
wherase
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whereas
40 % of males clean
withen
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within
more than half an hour.
On the other hand
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, pet caring and
reparing
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repairing
of the house are the least in time and
percentage
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. Approximately 20 percent of
wemon
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women
and men are caring
of
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for
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their
pet
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pets
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withen
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within
only 20 minutes.
Moreover
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, house
reparing
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repairing
preparing
are
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is
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douple
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double
in males
compered
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compared
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to
females
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.
Females
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spend less than 10 minutes on
this
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task.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "however".
Vocabulary: Replace the words percentage, females with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 3 times.
Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 4 times.
Vocabulary: The word "approximately" was used 2 times.
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