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The chart below shows the price in Euros of four types of bread per kilogram in one European country from 2001 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the price in Euros of four types of bread per kilogram in one European country from 2001 to 2005. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart below
provids
Correct your spelling
provides
 key information about the price in Euros of four types of
bread
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 per kilogram in one European country from 2001 to 2005. In
this
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topic
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topic,
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 I will write about what I see
in
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apply
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Linking Words
this
Correct determiner usage
apply
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below.
First,
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rate of people
used
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who used
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the
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apply
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Rye
bread
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 in 2001 it 0.6, and it
descreased
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decreased
 in 2002
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to adout
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adout
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about
 0,5.
Althogh
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Although
, it increased in 2003 to 0.6, the same as in 2004. And it to reising in 2005 about 0.7.
Second,
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Correct article usage
the propotion
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propotion
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proportion
 of people
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who use
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use
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used
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the
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apply
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white
bread
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 in 2001 it 0,6, the
percstage
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percentage
continue
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continued
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 until 2005
about
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at about
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 1.3.
Theerd
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Third
There
, the Brown
bread
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 it 0.6 , same
ass
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as
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 the withe and rye
bread
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 in 2001.
Also
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, it increased in 2002 by nearly 1.5 , and it rose
alittle
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a little
 in 2003 to 1.6 .
Although
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, it
dwscreased
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decreased
 in 2004 to 1.4 .
Also
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, it
rising
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rose
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 to 1.6 in 2005 ,
same
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the same
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 as in 2003.
Finally
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,
rate
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the rate
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 of people
use
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used
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the
Correct article usage
apply
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Wholegrain
bread
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 in 2001 it 0.8. And it increased to 1.8 in 2002.The rate
continue
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continues
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decline
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to decline
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 until 2004
about
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at about
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 0.7 .And it rose a little in 2005 to 0.8.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "also".
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Introduction: The introduction is missing.
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Introduction: Change the first sentence in the introduction.
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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Basic structure: Add more body paragraphs.
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Introduction: The chart intro is missing.
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Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 92%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words bread with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: Only 6 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 5 times.
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