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The table shows the carbon dioxide (CO2) production in five nations in 2005 and 2006.

The table shows the carbon dioxide (CO2) production in five nations in 2005 and 2006.
The dramatic problem of carbon dioxide has
be
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 paid more attention by worldwide countries.
This
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 table shows the CO2
prodution
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production
 in five nations --The table presents CO₂
emissions
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 (amounts), average per
capita
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 levels, and
year - on - year
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year-on-year
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 changes for five nations (
China
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, US, Russia, India, Japan) in 2005 and 2006.  
China
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 witnessed an 11% rise in
emissions
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, climbing from 5600 to 6000, even though it had the lowest per
capita
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 rate of 4.8.
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, the US, boasting the highest per
capita
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 emission of 19.8, suffered a 2% decline, falling from 5900 to 5000. Russia and Japan showed no variation in their emission volumes, holding steady at 1699 and 1100+ respectively. India, with the lowest per
capita
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 figure of 1.2, registered an 8% increase, a sign of expanding industrial activity.   In summary, the data reveals contrasting trends:
China
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 and India’s emission growth against the US’s decrease,
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 Russia and Japan’s
emissions
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 stagnated. Per
capita
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 data underscores the US’s outsized contribution, yet developing nations like
China
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 and India, despite lower per
capita
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emissions
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, fuel the
overall
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 rise in global CO₂ output.

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Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 86%.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words emissions, capita, china with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "shows" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "data" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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