The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below

The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below The chart below shows participation in certain leisure activities by children in Australia. Write a report describing the information shown below
The provided bar chart illustrates the variations in participation in certain leisure activities in Australia by children.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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the boys are higher than girls in almost all the activities.
Moreover
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, children who
loves
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love
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watching TV/videos are the same
avarage
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average
in both genders.
According to
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what is shown in the chart
that
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apply
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the
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apply
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boys
who
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apply
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aged between 5 to 14
preffered
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preferred
watching TV. over skateboarding/rollerblading by around 60%.
Furthermore
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, the number of children who like computer games
are
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is
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80%, which is much higher than
who
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those who
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play bike riding
as well as
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art
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arts
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and
craft
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crafts
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that
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apply
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are 70% and 40% respectively. In
contrat
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contrast
, it is evident that girls likely
preffer
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prefer
watching TV over
Art
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Arts
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and craft with
60
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a 60
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% difference. Meanwhile, both
of skateboard
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skateboarding
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and art
considered
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are considered
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as
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apply
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a
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the
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least
comparing
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compared
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to other activities.
As it
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It
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is noticeable that electronic devices
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and
anmd
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and
bike riding are
at
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in
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the same range of usage, which
around
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is around
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60%

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Vocabulary: Rephrase your introduction. Words match: 78%.
Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • engagement levels
  • leisure activities
  • downward trend
  • popularity
  • participation rates
  • comparisons
  • analyze
  • general trends
  • highlight
  • significance
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