The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The chart shows British Emigration to selected destinations between 2004 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The diagram illustrates anticipations about the information of the British migration
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selected from 2004 to 2007.
Overall
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, the
people
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of England mainly come to Australia and Spain, so over the
years
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they have higher numbers than other countries.
On the contrary
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, in the USA and New
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,
people
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migrant from the UK was not too high, even low. France at a stable. The highest number of migrants reached about 51 thousand
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in 2006 in Australia.
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, at that time, Spain dropped sharply to less than 35 thousand. 2007 in these two countries,
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the above trend. Between 2004 and 2005 steady fluctuations from 39,40 in Australia to 35 in Spain. The British emigrated to New
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Zealand
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decline
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over the
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,
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a small
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difference in the first year and the
last
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year was only 2 thousand
people
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. In the USA.
While
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in 2004 and 2006, there were the same number at 25, the remaining two
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decreased. The more special in France reached the highest in 2005,
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in other
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, there
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irregular fluctuations.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
Vocabulary: Replace the words people, years with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: The word "reached" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "fluctuations" was used 2 times.
Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • emigration
  • destination
  • peak
  • trend
  • attractiveness
  • decline
  • preference
  • economic factors
  • migration decisions
  • fluctuations
  • consistent choice
  • gradual increase
  • perceptions
  • living conditions
  • opportunities
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