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The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. (10.35pm)

The bar chart and table show information about students from abroad studying in four English-speaking countries in 2004 and 2012. (10.35pm)
The bar chart depicts the total number of international
students
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 pursuing studies in four countries in 2004 and 2012,
while
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 the table presents the percentage of international
students
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 relative to the student population in those countries during the same years.
Overall
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, the total number and the proportion of overseas
students
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 rose in all countries, except for the USA, where the percentage levelled out. In the bar chart, the USA had the largest number of foreign
students
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, recording 150,000
students
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 in 2004 and nearly 250,000
students
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 in 2012.
In contrast
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, Canada remained the least popular country, with fewer than 70,000 in both years.
On the other hand
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, both the UK and Australia had just over 100,000 scholars in 2004, and by 2012, their numbers increased to just under 200,000 scholars, with a slight difference between the two.
According to
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 the table, Australia had the largest proportion of foreign
students
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 over the given period and
also
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 showed the greatest increase, rising from 19% to 24%.
This
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 was followed by the UK (9% to 13%) and Canada (5% to 7%), both of which experienced moderate growth. Meanwhile, the percentage of overseas
students
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 in the USA stayed constant at 2%.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words students with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "table" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 2 times.
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