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Writing Samples
Band 5

You are interested in learning a new skill and have decided to join a class. Write a letter to the instructor of the class requesting more information. You should include details about: - what skill you want to learn and why - your availability for attending classes - any specific questions you have about the course.

Dear Sir/ Madam, I want to inform you that I am very much interested in learning
French
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the French
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 language because in the
coming
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near
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 future, learning new
skill
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would
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 be beneficial for me in various ways. French is the second most spoken language in Canada. It would
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 be helpful for me in the immigration matters. I am looking for the classes as per my availability because I am
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 working
with
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 my studies. If I talk about my availability, I am only available for
weekends
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 classes only. I will be mostly available on Saturday and Sunday for the classes as it would be a week off from my work. Currently, I am learning French for my future permanent residency, to gain more points for my CRS score. I would like to ask about the types of courses you have and what will be the fees for
that
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. I am in
little
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 rush, so I would be looking for the crash course to learn it as soon as possible, Looking forward
for
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 your prompt reply with the details. Thank you. Yours faithfully, Kunalpreet Singh

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Try to give more details about your experience or reason for needing the skill.
coherence and cohesion
Make sure each paragraph clearly focuses on one main idea.
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Use a more polite tone when making requests.
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You clearly stated why you want to learn French.
coherence and cohesion
Your closing and greeting are appropriate for a formal letter.

The Greeting

Depending on the style and aim of the letter, you will need to adapt your greeting.

Always start an informal letter in the ways:

  • Dear + name
  • Hi / Hello + name

‘Dear...’ is more appropriate, so stick with this.

For a formal letter there are two options for the greeting:

  • Use Dear Sir or Madam if you don’t know the name of the person you are writing to.
  • Use Dear + surname if you do know their name, e.g. Dear Mr Smith or Dear Mrs Jones.

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