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The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedon, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The graph below shows the average carbon dioxide (CO2) emissions per person in the United Kingdom, Swedon, Italy, and Portugal between 1967 and 2007. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line diagram compares the average
carbon
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dioxide
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 (CO2) emissions, measured in metric
tonnes
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, in four European countries throughout a fifty-year period.
Overall
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, the data contained within the visual representation reveals that the average gas emissions were reduced the most in Sweden
whereas
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 the United Kingdom remained the highest among all countries. As the chart depicts, the volume of
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dioxide
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 in Sweden grew
initially
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 by 2.2 metric
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 since it was first measured in 1967, standing at 10.2.
This
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 increase declined significantly in the preceded decade, reaching 7 metric
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. There was a marginal but continuous decrease in
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dioxide
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, levelling at 5.7 metric
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 in 2007.
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, the United Kingdom’s emissions demonstrated a downward trend, plunging steadily from 10.8 in 1967 to 8.3 metric
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 in 2007.
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, Italy and Portugal experienced similar growth.
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 the share of
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dioxide
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 in Italy began to surge from 4.1 to 6.2 metric
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 in 1977, the figure remained consistent with a negligible increase, standing at 7.9 metric
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 in 1997 and plateaued until 2007.
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, the contribution of Portugal
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carbon
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dioxide
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 soared every decade, rising from below 2 metric
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 in 1967 to more than 5.5 metric
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 in 1997 and 2007.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words carbon, dioxide, tonnes with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "remained" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stand" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • CO2 emissions
  • per capita emissions
  • renewable energy
  • environmental policies
  • industrial growth
  • efficient energy policies
  • economic development
  • sustainable practices
  • carbon footprint
  • fossil fuels
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