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The exploration and development of safe alternatives to fossil fuels should be the most important global priority today. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

In
this
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 digital era , the new innovations and discoveries of
the
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other resources in order to produce
energy
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is
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 very crucial . I agree with the notion that it is a need
of
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 today's world to produce nuclear
energy
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 . To commence with , all the fossil
fuels
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such
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 as coal , oil and natural gas are at the edge of
its
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extinction.
Due to
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 the advancement of technology, people use fossil
fuels
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 on
their
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 daily basis and
also
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 increase in the
number of
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population is the biggest challenge to
fulfill
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fulfilling
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 the demands of renewable
energy
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.
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,
usage
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the usage
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 of cars
are
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 very popular
to commute
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for commuting
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 from one destination to another
therefore
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, people need to
full
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fill
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 their car tanks in order to run their vehicles. To add more , nuclear
energy
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 is the best alternative option to fossil
fuels
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 as it will help produce electricity without polluting the environment and it is convenient to generate power .
On the other hand
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 , fossil
fuels
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 are the reason
of
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for
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a
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global warming because the process of generating
energy
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 from them
released
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releases
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 harmful gases
such
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 as carbon dioxide a carbon monoxide which
depleted
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deplete
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 the ozone layer and
as a result
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,
temperature
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the temperature
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 has changed rapidly.
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, as per a survey,
melting
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the melting
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 of
glacier
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glaciers
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 has been recorded since 2010.
To conclude
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, nuclear
energy
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 is
clean
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a clean
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 and reliable source to produce electricity and to run
the
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power plants . People are encouraged to use electric cars over
the
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diesel and
patrol
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petrol
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 ones which will
put
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have
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majestic
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a majestic
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impacts
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impact
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 on
the
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entertainment.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly outline your main points in the introduction. It helps the reader understand what to expect.
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Try to add more specific examples to support your points. This makes your argument stronger.
coherence cohesion
Use linking words (like 'although', 'firstly', 'moreover') to connect your ideas better.
coherence cohesion
Check for grammar and spelling errors. They can distract the reader from your ideas.
coherence cohesion
The conclusion should summarize your key points clearly and restate your opinion in a stronger way.
task achievement
You have identified a need for alternative energy sources, which is a relevant topic.
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Your argument about nuclear energy being a cleaner option is a strong point.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • climate change
  • fossil fuels
  • safe alternatives
  • global priority
  • limitations
  • drawbacks
  • potential benefits
  • government
  • international cooperation
  • investing
  • research and development
  • challenges
  • obstacles
  • transitioning
  • individuals
  • businesses
  • adopting
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