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You live in a room in college which shared with another student.However,there are many problems with this arrangement and you find it very difficult to work. Write a letter to the accomodation officer at thee college In this letter, Describe your situation Explain your problems and why it’s difficult to work Say what kind of accomodation you would prefer.

Dear Officer, I am writing
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 letter to express my discomfort in the shared
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 of the dormitory. As you know, all students have their own private rooms in the university's dormitory. Recently, Peter, who came from the UK, had to be adjusted
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 and was allocated to my
room
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. At
first,
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the thought of having a roommate was
exhiliarating
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exhilarating
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However
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, after a few months,
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 sort of arrangement is not working for me. I am now dealing with a plethora of issues. The biggest problem is,
Peter
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 loves to stay up late at night, watching different kinds of movies.
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 he tries to be considerate by using earphones, he lacks the ability to
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suppress
 his emotions. He would often laugh loudly in the middle of the night. My sleep has been affected numerous times. Another issue is that
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 our personalities are the complete opposite. Peter is an extrovert. He occasionally invites his university friends to the
room
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, even when I am studying or finishing assignments. I spoke to him before about
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, and how it is affecting my grades. He promised to bring his friends over when I
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 not studying. Sadly, the promise was not kept for long.
To conclude
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, I would sincerely appreciate that if you
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 find another roommate for Peter, who shares the same personality traits as him, or if you
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could
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 assign another individual
room
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 for me. Personally, I adore being alone and I find myself very productive when there are no distractions. I hope either one of my requests can be entertained. Best regards, Jimmy Fung

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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to clearly separate your problems in each paragraph to improve clarity.
task achievement
Provide a little more detail or examples about how the situation affects your work for a better response.
greeting and closing
You have a clear greeting and closing in your letter.
logical structure
The structure of your letter is mostly logical, with clear sections.

Word Count

IELTS says that you should write a minimum of 150 words in writing task 1. If you go under word count you will lose marks in task response.

A very long letter will not give you a higher band score.

Aim for between 160 to 190 words in writing task 1. This will ensure a concise letter and will be realistic in terms of time management. You have only 20 minutes to write the letter and you need around 5 minutes of planning time, so you will not be able to write a long letter in 15 minutes.

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