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The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014

The graph below shows the average house prices in three countries between the years 1997 and 2014
The provided line graph compares the changes in the price of properties
among
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 three countries starting from 1997 until 2014.
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, the cost of houses in the stated countries adhered to rising trends, albeit to varying degrees.
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country
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 A
tend
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 to lead the rate, followed by
Country
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B
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, the other,
Country
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 C remained at the bottom, despite a gradual increase throughout the
time line
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. In fact,
Country
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 A and
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B
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 shared similar figures in the initial year, having a price tag of almost $200,000, yet by 2004 these statistics altered for both,
while
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 the former
country
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’s sales rose to almost $550,000, the latter reached $300,000.
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 continual growth, 5 years later
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B
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 experienced a rapid surge to a half million,
whereas
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 County A with a slight marginal decline, recovered in its house values. From that year on, the discrepancy became more pronounced, with
Country
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 A’s skyrocketing accommodation prices, accounting
$
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for $
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750,000 and with maintained figures of
the
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apply
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Country
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B
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.
Country
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 C,
however
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, illustrated a totally different trend, starting at about $120,000, housing
cost
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costs
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 in
this
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country
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 followed an uninterrupted upward trajectory before doubling in a decade, yet in the coming year it bounced back to its original point. In 2009,
this
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 figure grew to a quarter of
million
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a million
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 dollars and maintained a steady increase to $270,000 by 2013. By the end of the
period
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period,
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 sales fell back to the previous peak - $2500,000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words country, b with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "figures" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "trends" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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