In many countries around the world rural people are moving to cities so the population in the countryside is decreasing. Do you think it is a positive or negative development? give reasons for your answers and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience. write atleast 250 words.

In many nations around the
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there is an increasing trend of urbanization
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which the population in the rural area is decreasing .
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, I believe that
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is a negative development as
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harms the rural economies and Decreasing population creates an imbalance in the economy of the countryside. If many people are not present to support small ventures, entrepreneurs will shut down their businesses as they will face heavy losses.
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, in many rural areas, local grocery stores and family-owned shops have closed because there are not enough customers living nearby to keep them profitable.
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weakens the local economy even
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, as small businesses usually play a key role in providing employment and services to the community.

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Expand on your main points with more details and examples to support your views.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure all paragraphs have clear topic sentences and better transitions between ideas.
task achievement
The introduction clearly states your opinion about urbanization being negative.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
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