Some people say that the government should stop TV and Newspaper from showing crimes because media coverage of violent crimes is frightening people and encouraging criminals. Do you agree or disagree with the statement?

Media coverage increases fear among people by focusing on violent crimes more than other news. When the media shows violent crimes, it can make crime seem more common than it is. Seeing crime on TV or in newspapers may inspire some people to commit similar acts. The government should not fully stop media coverage
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but find a balance in reporting to avoid fear

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Make sure to develop your ideas more fully. Include reasons and examples to support your points.
coherence and cohesion
Try to use more linking words to connect your ideas smoothly. This will help your essay flow better.
coherence and cohesion
Clearly state your position in the introduction and conclusion without leaving it open to interpretation.
task achievement
Your essay addresses the topic and presents a clear opinion.
task achievement
You show an understanding of how media affects people’s fears.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general
Topic Vocabulary:
  • government
  • media
  • crime
  • newspaper
  • television
  • violent
  • fear
  • people
  • reporting
  • educate
  • balance
  • common
  • inspire
  • act
  • coverage
  • public
  • reduce
  • stop
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