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Band 2.5

Some people think they have the right to use as much fresh water as they want, while others believe that governments should strictly control the use of freshwater as it is a limited resource. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

On the one hand, fresh
water
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 is freely given from the earth for human society and that should not be a problem when humans consume it or do something with it but there are at least two problems in maintaining the presence of it.
Firstly
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, because fresh
water
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 is easy to get the fresh
water
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often
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 overused by companies to manufacture their products. To illustrate, for
a fashion companies
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fashion companies
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 so much amount of
water
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 is used to
coloring
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colour
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 their raw clothes.
Secondly
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, the speed of
cycle
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the cycle
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fresh
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of fresh
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water
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 consumed by humans is slower than the natural production
the
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of the
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water
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 itself. Back to the first example, in developing
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a contry
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contry
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country
, the waste of
water
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streamed
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streams
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 down to the river and
to meet
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meeting
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 the natural requirements to be fresh again will be
long
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a long
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way proccess
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process
.
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, some people
believes
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believe
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 that fresh
water
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 should be controlled by the
goverment
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government
 because of the
abused
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abuse
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on
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of
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the
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apply
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fresh
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freshwater
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water
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 usage. There are
minimum
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a minimum
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two
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of two
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option
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options
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 of policy that the government should do.
Government
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The government
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 should limit the usage of
the
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apply
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fresh
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freshwater
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water
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then
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 they should control the waste that the companies
thrown
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throw
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coherence and cohesion
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coherence and cohesion
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task achievement
You identified key issues regarding freshwater usage.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • freshwater
  • personal freedom
  • resources
  • daily necessities
  • environmental sustainability
  • depletion
  • regulation
  • distribution
  • underprivileged
  • future generations
  • conservative use
  • sustainable practices
  • monitoring
  • regulating
  • judiciously
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