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The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use.

The table shows the percentage of journeys made by different forms of transport in four countries, The bar graph shows the results of a survey into car use.
The table provides information on the percentage of distances covered by residents of the four nations using substitute transportation facilities.
Additionally
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, the line graph demonstrates the rationale behind choosing
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car
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a car
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 to commute in comparison
of
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to
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 other transports.
Overall
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, it is evident that
longest
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the longest
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 journeys were covered by travelling
on
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by
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car
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 in all the countries
whereas
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 the prominent reason to prefer a
car
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 among other facilities is the lack of other alternatives available to the
people
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. In Canada and Belgium, the proportion of the distance commuted
with
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car
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 accounted for 90 per
cent
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 and 72 per
cent
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, respectively.
In contrast
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, the
people
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 of Germany travelled 68 per
cent
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 of the total length
with
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by
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car
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a car
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while
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 47 per
cent
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 was covered by residents of
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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.
Moreover
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, Canadians, Germans and Flemish travelled around 2 per
cent
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 on
bicycle
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bicycles
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 and other means of transportation.
However
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,
bicycle
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the bicycle
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 was preferred by 26 per
cent
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 of
people
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 from
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the Netherland
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Netherland
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Netherlands
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.
Furthermore
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, the percentage of distance covered by
people
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 who commuted
with
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by
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 public transport and foot was relatively higher than the former modes of commutation.
On the other hand
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, 30 per
cent
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 of
people
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 selected private
four wheelers
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four-wheelers
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 to travel because they did not
had
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have
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 any other option to go for.
In addition
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, 22 per
cent
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 of commuters encouraged the convenience available
in
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of
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 travelling by
car
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 and 40 per
cent
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 of the individuals said that they wanted
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car
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a car
the car
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 for their employment. Another reason given by approximately 10 per
cent
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 is the benefit of quick commutation and they worked
night
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the night
a night
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 shift.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words car, people, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • percentage
  • journeys
  • transport modes
  • countries
  • survey
  • car use
  • highlight
  • noticeable trends
  • differences
  • analyze
  • discuss
  • significant findings
  • compare
  • data
  • connections
  • datasets
  • interpret
  • transportation habits
  • preferences
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