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The table shows the percentage of 5G network availability, the average download speed and percantage of mobile connections

The table shows the percentage of 5G network availability, the average download speed and percantage of mobile connections
The table compares the working of
5
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the 5
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G
network
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 in 2021 between five countries, on the basis of the
percentage
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 of 5G
network
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availability
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, its average download speed, and
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of 5G
network
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users
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 in that country.
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, the United States had the highest
availability
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 of 5G
network
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, but its speed was the slowest among the five countries and the
least
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lowest
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percentage
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 of
users
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.
China
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on
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 the other hand, had the lowest
availability
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, but its speed was faster than
US
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the US
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, and stood third in the
percentage
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 of mobile connections. South
Korea
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 had the
third highest
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third-highest
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 5G
availability
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 but was the leader in
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percentage
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the percentage
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 of mobile
users
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 and stood second in average
network
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 speed. As of 2021, nearly half of the US has access to
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a 5
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G
network
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, with its
availability
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 being 49.2%. Close to
this
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 are
Netherlands
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the Netherlands
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 and South
Korea
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, wherein the
availability
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 of 5G stands at 45.1% and 43.8%, respectively. Trailing behind
this
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 is Saudi Arabia, where only 35.5% of the country has
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a 5
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G
network
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availabile
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available
, and
lastly
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,
China
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 where only 19.8% has
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a 5
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G
netwrok
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network
 available. When it comes to average speed these figures change dramatically, the US has an average speed of just 52.3
MBps
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, which is the slowest on the list.
China
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 almost doubles
this
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 number, with an average speed of 113.1
Mbps
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. In
Netherands
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Netherlands
 the download speed is around 77.2
Mbps
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,
whereas
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 in Saudi Arabia
this
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 increases by 300
Mbps
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 to 377.2, making it the country with the fastest average download speed. South
Korea
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 comfortably sits at the second position with 354.4
Mbps
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.
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Percentage
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The percentage
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 of Mobile
users
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 is not closely linked with
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apply
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network
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availability
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, The US and Netherlands have just 4% of
its
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their
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 population using 5G. In
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China
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China,
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 11% of people use 5G
network
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.
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 having the fastest connection, Saudi Arabia
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 has the second largest number of mobile connections, which is 17% , and South
Korea
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 has 22% of its population surfing via 5G, which is the highest among the given countries.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words g, network, percentage, availability, users, china, korea, mbps with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "percentage" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "percentage" was used 6 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "stood" was used 3 times.
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