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In a number of countries, some people think it is necessary to spend large sums of money on constructing new railway lines for very fast trains between cities. Others believe the money should be spent on improving existing public transport. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

It is
considerd
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considered
 by some
people
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that is
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 crucial to spend a large amount of
country’s
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the country’s
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 outcomes on building new railway paths for express
trains
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 between nations,
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 others
argued
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 that money
sould
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should
 be spent on developing public transportation
instead
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. In my opinion, I think that both
prespectives
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perspectives
 are
signifićant
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significant
 for
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the country
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country
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 development, to provide convenience and
more
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a more
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orgnized
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organised
 transport system. On the
one
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 hand, spending a lot of money on
modren
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modern
trains
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 can offer easier life,
espacially
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especially
 for workers who live
faraway
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far away
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 from their workplace.
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,
one
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 of the most common
issue
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issues
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 that most of the employees face is transportation in
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the morninig
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morninig
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morning
 hours,
due to
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 the fact
that
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is
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the roads become
crawded
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crowded
 at
this
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 time.
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, having a
convenience
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 and faster way like fast
trains
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 can tackle
this
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 problem by taking a lot of
people
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 to their work at
one
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 time.
For example
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, Japan is
one
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 of these countries who modernized their
trains
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, and
this
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adressed
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addressed
 the
craweded
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crowded
 traffic in the cities.
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, improving public transport will have an effective impact on cities’ traffic.
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, the majority of
people
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 are using cars and buses more than
trains
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.
As a result
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, the effect of these improvements will benefit a large number of
people
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.
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, studies have shown that about 70% of
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individuals are using traditional vehicles, so they need to be the top priority to be improved. In conclusion,
although
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 rapid
trains
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 offer several advantages for citizens like
geeting
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getting
 to their work faster,
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the country’s
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 transport
infrusture
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frustule
 is important to
benefits
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benefit
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a
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the
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 possible number of
people
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 who
used
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 cars and buses.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words (like 'however', 'furthermore', and 'for example') to help the reader follow your ideas better.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar, especially for common words, to make your writing clearer.
content
You have good ideas about the importance of both fast trains and public transport.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • infrastructure
  • efficient
  • congestion
  • sustainable
  • environmentally friendly
  • connectivity
  • economic growth
  • public transportation
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