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Fossil fuels are essential for producing electricity, powering industry and fueling transportation. However, one day we will reach a point when all the world’s fossil fuels have been depleted. How can we conserve these resources? What are some alternatives to fossil fuels?

The world is currently reliant on oil, coal and natural gas for the majority of its
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 requirements but there will come a time when these run out.
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 essay will discuss how we can help to prevent our non-renewable resources from becoming depleted by using our cars less frequently and it will name some natural forces that can be harnessed to generate
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. Conserving
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 is a responsibility of every individual and an important way in which we can all do our bit is to use more
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-efficient means of transport. The easiest way to do
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 is to leave the car at home and walk or cycle to our destination if it isn’t too far away
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 or take public transport for longer journeys. Another way to reduce our fuel consumption is to car share. Whenever my friends and I get together for coffee, we agree to meet up at a café that we can each get to without having to drive our cars there. We usually go on foot or ride our bikes. If everyone made small decisions like
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, it would make a real difference. The most sustainable alternatives to fossil fuels are the generation of
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 from natural forces
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 as the sun, wind and oceans. Solar and wind
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 are already widely used across the world but it is wave
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 and tidal
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 that have the greatest untapped potential to provide for our
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 needs in the future. A report recently commissioned in the United Kingdom estimates that tidal
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 could meet as much as 20% of the UK’s current electricity demands once the technology being developed is operational. Wave
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 converters are expected to prove equally successful in the long term. In conclusion, our earth’s reserves of fossil fuels will not
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 forever and we need to be continually developing new technologies to enable us to produce
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 from renewable sources
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 as the sun, wind, and water. In the meantime, we can help to slow the rate of depletion by leaving our cars at home and using more
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-efficient forms of transport whenever possible.

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Make sure all your points are well supported with examples.
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Use clear linking words to connect your ideas more clearly.
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Try to give a wider range of examples to strengthen your argument.
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Your introduction clearly outlines what the essay will discuss, which is great for guiding the reader.
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You provide specific examples of energy-efficient transport, which makes your argument stronger.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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