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The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summaries the information by selecting amd reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.

The maps below show the centre of a small town called islip as it is now, and plans for its development. Summaries the information by selecting amd reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant.
The maps illustrate the layout of the city
centre
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 in Islip now and in the
future
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.
Overall
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,
whereas
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 some facilities will remain there, several changes will be added to
this
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area
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 in the
future
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.
Additionally
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, the number of facilities will increase, and those new buildings will be mainly constructed in the northern
area
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 which is mentioned as countryside so far. Specifically, regarding the remaining sections, the two rows of shops will decrease into one, and the three components,
such
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 as a residential
area
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, a school and a park, will be in the same positions in the
future
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 as well.
However
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, even though the main
road
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 will stay on the
future
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 layout, the shape of that
road
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 will be significantly changed from horizontal to circle to cover the entire
centre
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.
In addition
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, another housing will be demolished and reconstructed on the southwest
side
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.
On the other hand
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, as displayed on the new map, it is predicted that several new facilities will be built there.
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, one of the current two rows of shops will be replaced by a bus station, a shopping
centre
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, a parking
area
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, a pedestrians' zone and a new housing
area
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.
Furthermore
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, another new housing section will be built on the left
side
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 of the park, which is on the southeast
side
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, and the main
road
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that is
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 predicted to transform its shape will be
also
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dual
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a dual
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 carriageway. In comparison, the structure of
this
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 city
centre
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 will radically transform as more people will be able to live in
this
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 region. What is more,
although
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 the current two roads which are directed towards the south
side
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 are not connected, they are predicted to be integrated into a large
road
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 in the development plan.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words centre, future, area, road, side with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "maps" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "changes" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • town center
  • main road
  • traditional layout
  • commercial areas
  • residential housing
  • rural land
  • urban development
  • dual carriageway
  • pedestrianized
  • bus-only areas
  • public transport
  • commercial infrastructure
  • shopping center
  • car park
  • bus station
  • residential housing
  • retain
  • expand
  • accessibility
  • commercial activity
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