Some people think that economic progress is the only way to end poverty while others believe that it is causing damage to the environment and so should be stopped. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

In the contemporary era, economic stability and environmental degradation are the prominent issues faced by humanity.
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has prompted a debate,
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some argue that economic progress is causing damage to the environment and
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should be discarded, others believe that
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is the only solution to deal with poverty. In my opinion, a more balanced approach
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with
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of them together is an effective solution.
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, dealing with environmental damage and poverty
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can go hand in hand, as
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of them are interlinked to each other. To illustrate,
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of a sustainable development model
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renewable sources of energy
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as solar, wind and hydropower will not only help combat pollution
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create jobs, improve the infrastructure and boost
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the economic
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conditions of the nation.
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, these methods will mitigate poverty and enhance income stability for people.
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, government policies and funding towards
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in equal proportion will help deal with the problems simultaneously.
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, regulations for carbon taxes for industries will not only reduce pollution
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will push them to adopt sustainable methods on the go. A
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consideration,
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can help subsidize greener technology and encourage entrepreneurial ideas and businesses related to the same. In conclusion,
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it is considered that economic stability is the main issue causing environmental
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whereas
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, if we follow practices
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as a sustainable development model, implement strict regulations and policies and subsidize greener technologies we can help mitigate the negatives.
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, a balanced approach is needed to have a sustainable and developed nation altogether.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • economic progress
  • job opportunities
  • reduced poverty
  • infrastructure and services
  • improved technologies
  • environmental degradation
  • unchecked economic growth
  • long-term negative effects
  • sustainable development
  • environmental protection
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