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The maps below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time. Akerke

The maps below show how the ground floor of a particular building has changed over time. Akerke
The given maps illustrate the evolution of the ground floor from 1958 to the present
times
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time
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.
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In O2001
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O2001
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2001
,it turned into a flower shop with several changes.
For instance
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, the living
room
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 plays the role of gift cards,and the bathroom and shower are replaced by a play
area
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 and
expanding
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expanded
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 with flowers. On to right side,two
building
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buildings
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 served as an office. There was a meeting
room
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 in the left corner of the map,behind it there were assistant’s and secretary’s offices, a toilet
at the end
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 of them. Major shifts happened between 1985 and 2000 to being an apartment. The previous meeting
room
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 was replaced by the living
room
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,
while
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 the assistant’s and secretary's offices were destroyed to make a new bathroom and a shower.
In addition
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,the manager’s office and reception
area
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 were demolished to build two bedrooms.But the kitchen in the corner stayed unchanged. In 2001, it turned into a flower shop with several changes.
For instance
Linking Words
, the living
room
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 plays the role of gift cards,and the bathroom and shower are replaced by a play
area
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 and
expanding
Wrong verb form
expanded
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 with flowers.On to right side,two bedrooms were renovated for the office
room
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 and flower
area
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.There was no change placement of the kitchen.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "for instance".
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Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words room, area with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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