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Band 2.5

More and more people are using computer and electric device to access information. Therefore, there is no need for printed books, magazine and newspapers. To what extent do you agree or disagree ?

many individuals essentially choose to have electronic
device
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devices
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instead
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 of
books
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 to gather
information
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.
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, will there be a demand for
books
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,
magazine
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magazines
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newspaper
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? I agree that humans often select to use electronic
device
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devices
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 to get vital
information
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 The first reason why I consent
nowdays
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nowadays
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,
receive
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receiving
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 and
search
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searching for
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information
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 has become very easy for people, especially the younger generations
such
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 as learners,schoolboys or schoolgirls. Can gather
information
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 from
thousand
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books
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of books
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 in just
few
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 seconds and save up their own time The second reason why
i
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 assent is
books
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 are boring for many individuals
due to
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gainging
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gaining
information
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 by reading is partially
monotonus
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monotonous
 and that's why humankind
decide
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 to gain knowledge by computer or electronic device you can listen to podcasts, view the news. and People find it more engaging to acquire
information
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 not only through reading but
also
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 by listening to and viewing it.
As a result
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, there is a growing population of digital devices. In
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conclusion
conlcusion
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 many individuals will choose smart devices rather than
books
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due to
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 several reasons.
On
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 my opinion gathering
information
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 by
listning
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listening
or
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 viewing videos or podcasts is significantly more satisfying.
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, you can have several amount of book data in your smartphone which keeps citizens flexible and
save
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saves
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 their own time

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Make sure to clearly answer the question in your introduction and conclusion. Your position should be easy to see.
coherence and cohesion
Try to organize your ideas in a clearer way. Use paragraphs for each main idea.
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Use more specific examples to support your points. This makes your argument stronger.
coherence and cohesion
Check your spelling and grammar. There are some small mistakes that can be fixed.
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You showed a clear opinion on the topic.
coherence and cohesion
You have good reasons for your opinion about digital devices being more engaging.

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To get an excellent score in the IELTS Task 2 writing section, one of the easiest and most effective tips is structuring your writing in the most solid format. A great argument essay structure may be divided to four paragraphs, in which comprises of four sentences (excluding the conclusion paragraph, which comprises of three sentences).

For we to consider an essay structure a great one, it should be looking like this:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

Our recommended essay structure above comprises of fifteen (15) sentences, which will make your essay approximately 250 to 275 words.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • digital devices
  • access information
  • printed materials
  • immersive experience
  • environmental concerns
  • tactile experience
  • digital divide
  • relevant
  • technology access
  • eco-friendly
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