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Topic: Study abroad can be highly motivational for students and also inspire their dreams. However, whilst studying abroad can have a number of positive effects on students, there are also many difficulties that they may meet along the way. With this is in mind, it is more advantages to study at home. To what extend do you agree or disagree?

Billions are committed to a growth-driven world. Taking education from foreign
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 can be highly encouraging for learners
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 inspire their aspirations.
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 studying in foreign countries can have
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many beneficial effects on students,there are
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 number of problems that they may meet along the way. With
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 thinking ,it is more
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advantageous
 to study at home.
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, the importance of learning in foreign countries cannot be neglected. To commence, there are
varoious
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various
 reasons for learning in abroad. First and foremost, by
gainning eductaion
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gaining education
 in
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 countries they are leaving their comfort zone
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 which they can
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 their decision
independantly
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independently
.
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,
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 change may help in the betterment of their
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.
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, foreign
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 are wealthy and developed
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because
 of which young individuals can get better
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 for their
eduction
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education
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 which can lead to
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high paying
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job
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 in the distant
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, a
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statistical
 survey analysis done by a prestigious newspaper
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 that around 80% of learners can get good
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jobs
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in
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abroad.
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, by taking education in non-native
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nations
 students can
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 know how to save money for their
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as well as
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 for education. So,
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 them in their self-growth
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achievement
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the achievement
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 of their dreams.
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, young people
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also
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 assist their
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by
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this
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 thinking.
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, they may
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investment
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 in their native
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 which can improve the economy of their country.
To conclude
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,I completely concur with
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 as it has various positive effects on the
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 of the youth. Everyone will realize the importance of
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 concept and they will start
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 better life.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly state your main opinion in the introduction and conclusion.
coherence cohesion
Use more linking words to connect your ideas, such as 'firstly', 'secondly', 'in addition', and 'finally'.
task achievement
Try to give specific examples that support your points, like personal experiences or well-known cases.
task achievement
You provide some good reasons for studying abroad, such as independence and better job opportunities.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a clear structure with an introduction, body paragraphs, and a conclusion.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • broadens students' horizons
  • global awareness
  • educational facilities
  • intercultural communication
  • financial strain
  • cost of living
  • homesickness
  • cultural shock
  • mental health
  • academic performance
  • networking opportunities
  • career prospects
  • government policies
  • visa restrictions
  • support systems
  • adapting to a new culture
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