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The pie charts below show the revenue sources for US highways for last year and US highway expenditure by type for last year.

The pie charts below show the revenue sources for US highways for last year and US highway expenditure by type for last year.
Two
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pie
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 charts are presented. The first
pie
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chart
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 illustrates
last
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year
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's
sources
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 of revenue for United States' highways and the second illustrates what
this
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 revenue was spent on
last
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year
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. It can be clearly seen that
while
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 the
money
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 raised for US highways
last
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year
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 was reasonably spread between different
sources
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, nearly three-quarters of the
money
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 was spent on only
two
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 areas: capital outlay and maintenance and traffic services. The first
pie
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chart
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 shows that the
two
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 largest
sources
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 of
money
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 for US highways
last
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year
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 were of a similar proportion, central government funds with 26.5 per
cent
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 and motor fuel taxes with 26 per
cent
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. The next
two
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 specific
sources
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 of
money
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 were bonds and motor vehicle taxes with 14.9 percent and 12.2 percent respectively. Tolls provided a negligible 4.3 per
cent
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 and "other"
sources
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, which are not
specificed
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specific
, provided 16.1 per
cent
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. The second
pie
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chart
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 shows that by far the largest amount of the revenue shown in the first
pie
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chart
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 is spent on capital outlay at 48.8 per
cent
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. The next significant amount is spent on maintenance and traffic services at 23.8 per
cent
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. The remainder of the
money
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, just over a quarter of the total, is spent on highway patrol and safety, administration, bond retirement and interest on debt at 8.8 per
cent
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, 7.9 per
cent
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, 6 per
cent
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 and 4.7 per
cent
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 respectively.

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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "last".
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Vocabulary: Replace the words two, pie, chart, year, sources, money, cent with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "charts" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "illustrates" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "shows" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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