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The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The chart below shows the changes that took place in three different areas of crime in Panama City from 2010 to 2019. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The chart illustrates the behaviour of
crrime
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crime
 and incidents in
Panama
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city
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City
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 during
period
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the period
a period
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 of 2010 to 2019.
Overall
Linking Words
, in
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panama
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Panama
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 city burglary in
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panama
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Panama
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 city
fall
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fell
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 over the period. car theft and robbery
having
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had
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fluctuating
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a fluctuating
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 trend from year 2010 to 2019, Where in 2010 burglary
incident
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incidents
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 was highest and robbery
was
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were
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 lowest.
According to
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chart
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the chart
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 the crime rate is falling over the period of time, where
burglary
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a burglary
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has
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had
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 3500 incidents in
year
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the year
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 2010
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then
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and then
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slight
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a slight
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 increase in 2011 around to 3900 incidents. After
that
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that,
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 it is
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continuously
continuesly
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continued
falling
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to fall
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 till 2015 and become steady till 2019. Where it is now
second
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the second
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 highest crime rate in 2019. On the other side,
robery
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robbery
 in
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panama
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Panama
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having
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had
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 nearly 600
incident
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incidents
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in 2010 and
become
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became
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 steady till 2019 without any large
increse
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increase
 or
decrese
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decrease
.
Moreover
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,
car
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the car
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 theft
incident
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incidents
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 was around 2800 in 2010 and
fall
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fell
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 to nearly 2200 in 2013,
then
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 it
is surpassing
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surpassed
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 the
burglury
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burglary
 and in 2019 it
is having
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had
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highest
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the highest
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 crime at around 3000 cases per year.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words panama with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "chart" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "fall" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "nearly" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Crime rates
  • Fluctuated
  • Significant spike
  • Consistent trend
  • Prevalent
  • Cumulative change
  • Enforcement
  • Correlate
  • Reduction/increase in crime
  • Categories of crime
  • Level of crime
  • Period of time
  • Analysis
  • Data representation
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