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The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant

The graph below shows the number of overseas visitors to three different areas in a European country between 1987 and 2007. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparison where relevant
The given line graph illustrates the number of
tourists
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 visiting three types of natural zones in Europe from 1987 to 2007.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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 the coastal and lakeside
areas
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 attracted the most international
visitors
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, especially between 1992 and 2002,
while
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 the mountains were less popular among
tourists
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. In the initial years, coastal and lake
areas
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 had 40 and about 10
thousand
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visitors
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, respectively. In 1992, the coastal area experienced a marginal decline to about 32
thousand
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,
whereas
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 visits to the lakes increased to 30
thousand
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. After that, the number of
visitors
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 to the coast showed steady growth, following an uninterrupted upward trajectory until 2007, reaching 70,000
tourists
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. Lake
areas
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 shared similar standings, showing consistent growth for a decade and reaching their peak number (75,000
visitors
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) in 2002.
However
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,
this
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 peak was not maintained and the numbers dropped to just over 50,000 in 2007. The mountains,
in contrast
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, had only modest growth. From 1987 to 1992, mountainous
areas
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 showed years of stability
at
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with
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 20
thousand
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visitors
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. Later, in 1997, mountainous
areas
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 welcomed just under 30
thousand
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tourists
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. By 2007,
this
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 figure showed a minor fall and a subsequent rise, reaching 30
thousand
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visitors
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.

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Sentences: Add more complex sentences.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, areas, visitors, thousand with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "number of" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "growth" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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