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in many countries, sports and exercise classes are replaced with the Academic subjects, discussed the effect of this trend

Many nations
concerned
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are concerned
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 that
sports
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 and fitness classes are taken over by
the
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apply
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academic
subject
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subjects
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. My point of view is that
sports
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 classes
are played
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play
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significant
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a significant
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 role in
the
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student life.
To begin
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with
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with,
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 many schools are only focusing on Academic subjects,
however
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, if
student
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the student
a student
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 is not good
in
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at
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 studies, he makes
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a carrier
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carrier
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career
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 in
the
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sport
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sports
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 fees.
For instance
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 in
Indian
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the Indian
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 cricket team. There are many players who are not taking admission
in
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to
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 higher studies. They only focus on their games
for
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apply
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them
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apply
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or playing
sports
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help
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helps
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 to teach
team
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the team
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 about teamwork, leadership, and self-confidence, and
also
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 prepare for challenges which we face in our life
on the other hand
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, manage students are
studying
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study
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 continuously for 5 to 6 hours daily. Their mental health is
disturb
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disturbed
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 after
few
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a few
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 years.
Moreover
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, many students are studying over the computer. They become fatty
from
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in
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 his body. So if a school
foster
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fosters
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an
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and
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an
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 environment that
deprived
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deprives
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 students
to give
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of
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 proper physical training, they may have
take
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less stress or
they
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loss
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lose
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their
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weight easily Conclusion should
also
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 give
important
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importance
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 to physical activities because many of them are not good
in
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at
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 studies, so they are the best in their
sports
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 and give peace or stressfree to the student edition to become fit from his body

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task achievement
Your introduction should clearly state your main idea. Try to elaborate a bit more on your viewpoint.
coherence and cohesion
Ensure that paragraphs flow logically. Use linking words to connect your ideas better.
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Make sure your conclusion summarizes your main points and restates your opinion clearly.
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You addressed the topic and provided examples.
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Some good points about the importance of sports were mentioned.
Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately

Linking words are very important in your essay.

To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.

Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.

In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.

Linking word examples:

  • firstly
  • secondly
  • thirdly
  • in additional
  • moreover
  • also
  • for example
  • for instance
  • therefore
  • however
  • although
  • even though
  • despite

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