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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.

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The graph below shows the proportion of the population aged 65 and over between 1940 and 2040 in three different countries.
The line graph illustrates the percentage of the population aged 65 or more over a period of 100 years in
Japan
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,
Sweden
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 and the
USA
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.
Overall
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, the
proportion
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 of
the
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people aged 65 and over saw a
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 rise in three countries from 1940 to 2040. The
proportion
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 of elderly people is expected to rise dramatically in
Japan
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. In the year 1940, the
USA
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 had approximately 10% of
population
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its population
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 aged 65 or older,
while
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 the figure for
Sweden
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 was just about 7.5%. Both of these two countries increased gradually over the following 50 years, reaching nearly 15%.
By contrast
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, the
proportion
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 for
Japan
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 stood at 5% in 1940, which was lower than
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 in the
USA
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 and
Sweden
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. From around 2000 onwards, the
proportion
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 in
Japan
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 rose relatively steadily for about 30 years, remaining below 10% until 2030.
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,
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Japan
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 is predicted to reach 28% in 2040, overtaking
Sweden
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 (25%) and
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USA
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the USA
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 (23%) to become the country with the highest
proportion
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 of elderly people.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words japan, sweden, usa, proportion with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "proportion" was used 5 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "rise" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "about" was used 2 times.
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