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The typical teaching situation of a teacher and students in the class will not exist by the year 2050. To what extent do you agree or disagree?

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, there is an improvement in
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 process.
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, the traditional
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 of teaching will be modified in the future.
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 it is important to improve teaching
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this
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 does not mean that traditional teaching
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 not beneficial. On the one hand, there are advantages of conventional teaching
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they help
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 to be more concentrated in the
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 no
distraction
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distractions
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 like
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, computers and
smart phones
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smartphones
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 which distract them during lectures.
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,
students
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 get high scores at the school. Conventional teaching
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 create
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 interpersonal
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 communication and
team-work
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 allows
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 to be more confident and more able to deal with difficult situations.
On the other hand
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,
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modern technology gets
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 in many sectors
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 in education.
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, there are numerous benefits of new technologies in education. It makes
teaching
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 process easier and more effective, since using artificial
intellegence
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intelligence
, as tools to assist in teaching, allow
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 to
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easy
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 compared to conventional
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, modern technologies help
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 to improve their problem-solving skills and critical thinking because they encourage
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 in the
class room
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classroom
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 in
more
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a more
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 creative
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. From my own perspective, I totally agree that traditional teaching
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 will be replaced in the future to be more creative and attractive to encourage
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 to
study
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 and learn. In conclusion, in the future, teaching
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 will be changed in,
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 there will be
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an improvement
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 in technologies
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worldwide
. I suggest that employees in
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 of
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 should improve their
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 of teaching to motivate
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 to learn and
study
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task achievement
Make sure your introduction clearly states your opinion on the topic. Add a clear thesis statement that shows your stance.
coherence
Try to have clearer topic sentences at the beginning of each paragraph that support your main points.
task achievement
Use more specific examples and details to support your points. It will make your argument stronger.
coherence
Check for small grammar mistakes, such as word forms and spelling, like 'intellegence.'
content
You have good points about traditional and modern teaching methods.
structure
Your conclusion summarizes your ideas well and shows your position clearly.

Support ideas with relevant, specific examples

Examples make your writing easier to understand by illustrating points more effectively.

Examples, if used properly, not only help you get higher marks for ‘Task Response’ but also for ‘Coherence’.

When giving examples it is best to put them after your main idea or topic sentence. They can be used in the middle of supporting sentences or they can be used to start a new sentence. There is no rule for where exactly to give examples in essays, logically they would come after your main idea/topic sentence or just after a supporting sentence.

Linking words for giving examples:

  • for example
  • for instance
  • to illustrate this
  • to give a clear example
  • such as
  • namely
  • to illustrate
  • take, for example

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • technology advancements
  • virtual learning
  • online education
  • individualized learning
  • personalized learning
  • facilitative role
  • collaborative learning
  • evolve
  • adapt
  • social interaction
  • communication skills
  • teacher-student relationships
  • flexible learning
  • lifelong learning
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