In many cities, old buildings are being destroyed to create more space for new housing. What is your opinion
Governments are destroying old
buildings
to clear up space for constructing Use synonyms
houses
in several cities. In my opinion, old Use synonyms
buildings
must Use synonyms
be demolishes
For Change the verb form
be demolished
establishment
of new housing because of land scarcity in urban areas and Add an article
the establishment
lesser
availability of amenities in them.
The primary reason Correct article usage
the lesser
of
Change preposition
for
destruction
of Correct article usage
the destruction
any
ancient Correct quantifier usage
apply
buildings
is that land is Use synonyms
scared
in big cities Correct word choice
scarce
Linking Words
due to
which it becomes necessary to knock down them. The shortage of housing is being faced because of Change preposition
apply
population
explosion in the present times. Eventually, the metro cities Correct article usage
the population
are
Verb problem
will
becoming
incompatible Wrong verb form
become
to grow
with the rising population. Clearance of old-times Verb problem
apply
buildings
ensures adequate space to build new Use synonyms
houses
for the dwellers of urbanised places. To fortify Use synonyms
further
, Linking Words
well-planned
restructuring of towns by demolishing classical infrastructure enables the construction of modernistic Correct article usage
the well-planned
buildings
for accommodation. Use synonyms
Likewise
, high-rise Linking Words
buildings
Use synonyms
which
were in a queue for less area, but numerous people Correct pronoun usage
apply
will be
able to reside there.
Wrong verb form
were
Linking Words
Further more
, the lack of amenities in old Correct your spelling
Furthermore
buildings
, Use synonyms
make
them abundant and useless. Correct subject-verb agreement
makes
On the contrary
, modern Linking Words
houses
and equipped with all the requirements Use synonyms
such
as speedy elevators, chimney Linking Words
system
, cooling and heating Fix the agreement mistake
systems
system
etc which Fix the agreement mistake
systems
facilitates
Correct subject-verb agreement
facilitate
residents
easier lifestyle. Advanced Change noun form
residents'
resident's
houses
are constructed with technological devices in order to survive. The Use synonyms
challenges
of natural climate is ensuring the safety of individuals living there Fix the agreement mistake
challenge
whereas
in old Linking Words
buildings
, chances of survival during earthquakes and floods are mitigated Use synonyms
due to
poor infrastructure.
In conclusion, from my perspective, Linking Words
demolition
of old Correct article usage
the demolition
buildings
Use synonyms
provide
space for constructing new Correct subject-verb agreement
provides
houses
and Use synonyms
lesser
vicinity is available in them Correct word choice
less
makes
them Wrong verb form
making
in
habitable.Change preposition
apply
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Use cohesive linking words accurately and appropriately
Linking words are very important in your essay.
To score effectively on your IELTS exam, you should make an effort to implement short concise sentences coupled with linking words.
Almost every sentence in your essay should have a linking word of some sort.
In fact, the only sentences that can omit linking words are your background sentence and thesis.
Linking word examples:
- firstly
- secondly
- thirdly
- in additional
- moreover
- also
- for example
- for instance
- therefore
- however
- although
- even though
- despite