Some people think it would be a good idea for schools to teach every young person how to be a good parent. Do you agree or disagree with this opinion? Describe the skills a person needs to be a good parent. Give reasons for your answer and include any relevant examples from your own knowledge or experience.

Parenting is a
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their own experiences as all children are very different from each other
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, distinctive approaches will be
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by guardians. I
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with the statement because at
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it is very arduous to understand
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massive responsibility . To commence with ,youngsters are occupied with their egregious
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activities
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as sports and art which will make them
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and talented
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, they can avail enormous opportunities in their future.
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, schools should not put them in
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a convoluted situation where they may
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any burden like how to become
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because they are
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naive and benevolent to understand these tips and tricks simultaneously, they have to focus on their studies and sports without any stress .
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, those adolescents
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their childhood will perform better in their latter years .
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,all the educational institutes let them teach only in their
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field rest they will come to know in
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future . There are plenty
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a person should have to be a better parent. First and foremost, patience is the key to
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successful guardians which
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them to listen to their kids
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, they can solve
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and provide them
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and ecstatic
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, they should be capable
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them
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education and
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magnificent
lifestyle so, it will
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their physical
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and
mental health.
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but not least, they are responsible
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them social and moral ethics which allow them to become a better version of themselves and they can serve
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society with their witty thoughts and sensible actions because it is a fundamental
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of
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modern society.
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, learning advanced things at
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age is not mandatory
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future
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they will have different opinions regarding parenting but , when they are ready to become parents
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they should have certain skills in order to provide a majestic life to their
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You provided some important points about the skills needed to be a good parent.

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