People from cities go to university more often than those who live in the country. Some people think that the government should make it easier to enter universities for people who live outside the cities and towns by setting lower entry requirements and tuition fees. to what extent do you agreee or disagree with this statement.

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that no crucial and
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by some
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problems
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the other hand, in the
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there was a many dreamer
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, They stop learning after high school . In my opinion, I
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should the universities look at
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issues and help the
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cities
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universty
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university
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from opinion.
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if the university
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them , they come back to work and
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to improve their
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come back they can do the same thing .
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especially we need more
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the people in
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the other should travel to the country to treatment him.
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views , I believe that learning is so critical . it leads to personal growth and
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environment
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an environment
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Make sure to clearly state your opinion in the introduction. This will help the reader understand your position better.
Coherence and Cohesion
Try to organize your ideas into clear paragraphs. Each paragraph should have one main idea, with supporting details. This will improve the flow of your essay.
Coherence and Cohesion
Use clearer language and correct grammar. Some sentences are difficult to understand and should be rewritten for clarity.
Task Achievement
Include more specific examples to support your points. This will enhance your argument and make it more convincing.
Task Achievement
You have a good understanding of the topic and present your opinion on the issue, which is important for the task.

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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • urban-rural divide
  • educational equity
  • accessibility
  • diversity
  • compromise
  • unfair advantage
  • quality of education
  • infrastructural development
  • scholarships
  • targeted interventions
  • equitable solutions
  • relocating students
  • socioeconomic barriers
  • government intervention
  • educational disparity
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