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The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The table below shows information about the population of New Zealand from 2011 to 2012 by age group. Summarize the formation by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The table displays information about
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population
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the population
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 rate of New Zealand for 4 different
age
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 groups between 2011
to
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and
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 2012 .
Overall
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 , the normal ratio of change in
population
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 is 0.6% all over the country . Residents above the
age
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 of 65 showed
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the higest
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higest
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highest
 variation with
increase
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an increase
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 of 4%
while
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population
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the population
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 of kids under the
age
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 of 15 and between 15 to 39 years decreased .
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Population
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The population
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 of citizens above the
age
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 of 65 soared dramatically
with
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by
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the
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apply
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4 % .
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However
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However,
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 the
population
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 of individuals between the
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age
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ages
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 of 40 to 60 gradually changed with
increase
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an increase
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 of 0.65 % which is the average ratio for
entire
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the entire
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 country .
On the other hand
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 , citizens below the
age
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 of 15 and between the
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age
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ages
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 of 15 to 39 showed
same
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the same
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 results . It showed that their
population
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 collapsed
bu
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by
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 - 0.2 % .
Highest
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The highest
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 number of people belong
the
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to the
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 category of 15 to 39

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Vocabulary: Replace the words population, age with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "information" in your introduction.
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Vocabulary: The word "showed" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "change" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "ratio" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increase" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • population growth
  • age group
  • increase
  • decline
  • elderly population
  • aging population
  • working-age population
  • stable labor force
  • modest increase
  • significant change
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