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Some people think that government is wasting money on the art and that money could be better spent elsewhere. To what extent do u agree or disagree?

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people
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 believe that
government
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the government
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is spent
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money
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art
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is wasting
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 government
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another
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place
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on
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 hand, many
people
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 is wasting. I Don't agree with that, because
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spent
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place
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 is better. I think
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, because it's great to
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place
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 or help more
people
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things
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with things
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 like house building or
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 and make area wonderful ,useful and make the
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. In conclusion,
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alot
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a lot
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 somewhere else is better. In the end
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 what the
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coherence and cohesion
Make sure to use proper sentence structure and grammar throughout your essay.
task achievement
Provide clearer examples and explanations for your ideas to support your main points better.
task achievement
You have clearly expressed your opinion on the topic, which is an important part of the task.
Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • cultural heritage
  • promoting cultural diversity
  • stimulates economic growth
  • creative industries
  • revenue
  • economic competitiveness
  • quality of life
  • wellbeing
  • social cohesion
  • strategic investment
  • sustainable development
  • accountability
  • extravagant
  • resilience
  • public discourse
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