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The line graph shows ‏السرقات ‏per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

The line graph shows ‏السرقات ‏per thousand vehicles in four countries between 1990 and 1999. Summarize the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates the total of car thefts per thousand vehicles in Great
Britain
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,
Sweden
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,
France
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, and
Canada
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 from 1990 to 1999.
Overall
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,
that
Correct determiner usage
apply
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car theft in
Sweden
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was
Verb problem
has
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 increased significantly in the
last
Linking Words
years
Correct quantifier usage
few years
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,
while
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 it
is
Verb problem
has
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 gone down
alot
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a lot
 in Great
Britain
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.
Moreover
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, the thefts in
France
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 and
Canada
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has
Correct subject-verb agreement
have
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 remained almost constant in all years.
In
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From
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 1990 to 1992 car theft increased in Great
Britain
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 and
Sweden
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,
while
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 in
France
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 and
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Canada
Add a comma
Canada,
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it's
Unnecessary verb
it
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 decreased.
In
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From
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 1993 to 1999 increased significantly in
Sweden
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, but in Great
Britain
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 decreased significantly between 1996 and 1999, in
Canada
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remainted
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remained
 stable, and in
France
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 decreased
slight
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slightly
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Linking words: Don't use the same linking words: "while".
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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Vocabulary: Replace the words britain, sweden, france, canada with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "decreased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "increased" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "significantly" was used 3 times.
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