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The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital of adults Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting snd reporting the main features, and majke comparisons where relevant.

The charts below give information about USA marriage and divorce rates between 1970 and 2000, and the marital of adults Americans in two of the years. Summarise the information by selecting snd reporting the main features, and majke comparisons where relevant.
The bar charts
depicts
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depict
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 the
number
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 of
marriage
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marriages
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 and
divorce
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divorces
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 in
USA
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the USA
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 and
Marital
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the Marital
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 status of Adults in America in two different years. The
number
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 of
marriage
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marriages
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 was high in 1970 and 1980, they were in
same
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the same
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ammount
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amount
 (2.5
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millions
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million
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). In 1990 it
was
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apply
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slightly
drop
Wrong verb form
dropped
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 to 2.5
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millions
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million
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, and
keep
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kept
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decrease
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decreasing
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 to 2
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millions
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million
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 in 2000. The
number
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 of
divorce
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divorces
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 were gently similar, it was
same
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the same
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 count in 1970 and 2000 (1 million),
then
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 an increase
was happened
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happened
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 in 1990, and
finnaly
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finally
 the highest figure was in 1980
in
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apply
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1.4
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millions
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million
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. In 1970 in America, marital status was held by married people in total 70%, a
litle
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little
 bit decrease to 59% in 2000. The percentage
was
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apply
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badly
goes
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went
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 down for the
one
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ones
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never
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who never
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 married,
in
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apply
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16% in 1970 and 20% in 2000. Not many widowed in 1970 (8%) but still higher than in 2000 (6%). Very small
ammount
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amount
 for the one divorce in 1970, only about 2%,
then
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 gently
grow
Wrong verb form
grew
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 to 9% in 2000.
Overall
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, it can be seen that
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number
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the number
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 of
marriage
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marriages
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 were bigger in both categories in
USA
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the USA
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 and America between 1970 and 2000.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words number, millions with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "number of" was used 4 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "decrease" was used 2 times.
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