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The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.

The chart shows the average number of hours each day that Chinese, American, Turkish and Brazilian tourists spent doing leisure activities while on holiday in Greece in August 2019.
According to
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 what is shown, the Chinese
tourists
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 spent eight
hours
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 per day reading, which is twice the amount of
time
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 compared to the
Turkish
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 and Brazilian
tourists
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. They
also
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 spent the least
time
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 visiting places, with significantly less
time
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 compared to the American and
Turkish
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 groups. The chart does not specify the exact
time
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 Chinese
tourists
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spent
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 at the beach or visiting places.In terms of Brazilian
tourists
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, they spent six
hours
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 at the beach, the longest among all groups.
Similarly
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, the
Turkish
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 and Brazilian groups spent a total of four
hours
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 each reading books. Both the American and
Turkish
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tourists
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 spent three
hours
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 each visiting places, which is three times the amount of
time
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 compared to the Chinese group.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Write more paragraphs.
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Vocabulary: Replace the words tourists, hours, time, turkish with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
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Vocabulary: The word "compared" was used 3 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "amount" was used 2 times.
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • average number
  • leisure activities
  • tourists
  • nationalities
  • cultural trends
  • interests
  • vacation
  • influence
  • participation
  • impact
  • weather
  • events
  • festivals
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