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Band 2.5

Many people are changing their careers. what are the reasons for changing? and can there be any positive or negative impact by person or by society as whole.

More individuals these days are frequently changing their careers, the reason might be various, which leads to more positive
effect
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 in humankind or the community in comparison to the negative side.
Firstly
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, changing careers can be
stressfull
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stressful
since
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.
its
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 time
consuming
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 and
its
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 not
a
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 easy task as you already spent some years learning and training for one field and changing it to
different
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a different
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 field
you
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require
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requires
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 more time.
Furthermore
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, as you are
usedto
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used to
 in one area, it can be difficult to adjust in
new
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a new
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 area.
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, changing the path can provide you
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with alot
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alot
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a lot
 of knowledge in different fields and more learning helps you to be
more
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wiser.
Secondly
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, as a whole for
community
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the community
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, changing career
path
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paths
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 can become
as
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a trend which might impact
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the
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younger generation for not to be commitment in one field and will not be able to handle
pressure
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the pressure
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 of study and transferring to another subject can be
easy
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an easy
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 choice for them.
overall
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,
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even though
eventhough
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even though
 changing career
path
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paths
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 can
making
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 people lazy or less
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committing
commiting
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committed
 it gives them various choices and
more
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apply
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changing
it
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result
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results
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 in
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gaining
gainning
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gaining
 more knowledge

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Make sure your introduction clearly states the reasons for changing careers and the impacts. This will help the reader know what to expect.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words and phrases to connect your ideas better. This can help the flow of your essay.
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Try to provide specific examples to support your points. This will make your argument stronger and more convincing.
coherence and cohesion
In the conclusion, summarize your main points clearly to reinforce your argument.
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You presented the topic clearly and acknowledged both positive and negative impacts of changing careers.
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You identified some challenges that come with changing careers, which adds depth to your response.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • Career mobility
  • Professional development
  • Reskilling and upskilling
  • Job market fluctuation
  • Workforce diversification
  • Vocational satisfaction
  • Economic restructuring
  • Lifelong learning
  • Financial uncertainty
  • Social adaptation
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