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: The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.

: The graph below gives information about the price of bananas in four countries between 1994 and 2004. Write a report for a university, lecturer describing the information shown below. Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features and make comparisons where relevant.
The line graph illustrates how much
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bananas
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 cost in four different countries over a 20-year period.
Overall
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,
it is clear that
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Japan
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 had the most expensive
bananas
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through out
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throughout
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 the period shown,
whereas
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bananas
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 in the
USA
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 were the cheapest. The values of
bananas
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were fluctuating
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 in
France
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,
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germany
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Germany
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 and
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USA
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the USA
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, and experienced only minimal changes. In 1994, the price of one Kilogram of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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 was the highest at around 1.90
dollars
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,
while
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 that of the
USA
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 totalled approximately 0.8
dollars
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. At that time, the
prices
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 of
bananas
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 in
Freance
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France
 and
Germany
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 were at around 1.70 and 1.40
dollars
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 per
killogram
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kilogram
, respectively. in 1999, The
prices
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 of
bananas
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 in
Japan
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,
France
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 and
Germany
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 experienced a sudden drop, which was followed by a growth.
However
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, the
prices
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 in the
USA
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 remained unchanged. By 2004, both
Japan
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 and
France
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 had growing
prices
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 of one
killograms
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kilogram
 of
bananas
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, totalling around 2.50
dollars
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 in
Japan
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 and 1.50
dollars
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 in
France
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. Both
Germany
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 and the
USA
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 had quite similar banana
prices
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 at nearly 1.20
dollars
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 per
killogram
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kilogram
.

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Vocabulary: Replace the words bananas, japan, usa, france, germany, dollars, prices with synonyms.
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Vocabulary: The word "around" was used 3 times.
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