In some countries, the number of shootings increase because many people have guns at home. To what extent do you agree or disagree? Give specific reasons and examples to support your answer. Acros

There is a higher amount of
gun
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firing going on in some nations
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owning a
gun
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in the house, and
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strongly agree with
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statement, because keeping a
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at home can be easily accessible for everyone and it may lead to accidental or intentional.
Firstly
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, owning a
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at home can create violent behaviour, even in small arguments or
angerness
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anger
,
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and can
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compel the person to use a
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.
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, in
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USA
we get to hear many news about shootings in schools or at home by normal persons, which
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because of
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the easy
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acess
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access
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guns. Another reason can be,
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that some
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people don't take
the
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apply
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gun
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guns
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seriously and keep
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them
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in a place where kids or vulnerable people can reach
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apply
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it
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which
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leads to unfortunate
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.
for example
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, in many
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we hear that some kids
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accidentally
use a
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as they think
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it
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as
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is
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a toy. So personally
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believe the strong rules regarding owning a
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can help to
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control
these problems
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, some individuals argue by saying that keeping
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gun
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a gun
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can make them feel safe and can use it for
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their own
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safety.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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