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Some people say that the only reason for learning a foreign language is in order to travel to or work in a foreign country. Others say that these are not the only reasons why someone should learn a foreign language. Discuss both these views and give your own opinion.

There is no denying the fact that travel and work in a foreign country develop our languages and many
others
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skills
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.
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 my opinion, I consider that the person who
want
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wants
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learning
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to learn
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 anything not only language by practice, make some steps , and
to do
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 list for every day. Now I will discuss
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both views and
then
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 I will talk about my opinion.
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person
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the person
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 who always travels.
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, he meets
people
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 from
diffrents
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different
country
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countries
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 and
culuters
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cultures
. It leads, to
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 his speaking , communication
skills
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 , and
listning
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listening
. To elaborate, I see
this
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 is the important thing to learning any language , we
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 it inputs . If we use
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this
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 inputs
with
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correct
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 way , We will see the result
fastly
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.
One
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 the other hand,
person
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a person
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 who
learning
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learns
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 language by himself, by
youtube
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YouTube
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 or
watch
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by watching
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 movies. The
listning
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listening
 was good but
other
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my other
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skills
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was
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were
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 not very well.
Morover
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Moreover
,
people
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 who play video games and talk with others like
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 or
discord
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 the conversations of them was very nice.
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, despite
people
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 having
diffrent
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different
 views , I believe that everything you want
learn
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 or improve any
skills
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,
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can do
it
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by
take
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taking
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 time and
do
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doing
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the
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your
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 best . No
diffrents
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differences
 between
any
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apply
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people
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on
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where
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who
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 learn it but how I can
acheive
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achieve
 it and arrive
to
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at
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 my goals.

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task achievement
Make sure to clearly outline your views in the introduction.
coherence cohesion
Use simple linking words for better flow, such as 'firstly', 'next', and 'finally'.
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Add more examples to support your points.
coherence cohesion
Check for spelling mistakes and correct them, like 'diffrents' to 'different'.
task achievement
You have a clear opinion, which is great!
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You included examples of how people learn languages in different ways.

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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
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    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
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Topic Vocabulary:
  • multilingual
  • linguistic proficiency
  • globalized world
  • cross-cultural communication
  • immersive experience
  • adaptability
  • cultural exchange
  • interpersonal skills
  • employment prospects
  • empathy
  • intellectual development
  • overcome language barriers
  • global market
  • resourceful
  • life-changing
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