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Band 5.5

Both government investment in public transport systems and reductions in public transport ticket prices will help to reduce transport pollution greatly. Do you agree or disagree with this statement?

Reducing public
transport
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fares
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while
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 developing
pubic
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public
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transport
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 systems is thought to significantly reduce carbon emissions.
This
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 essay will clearly outline the benefits of implementing government investments and reducing ticket sales.
Due to
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 the lack of investment in public
transport
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,
people
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 often prefer to
use
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thier
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their
 own private
vehicles
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, which has led to the surging rise in carbon emissions.
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, the frequent
use
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 of
petrol fueled
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vehicles
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 has resulted in large quantities of carbon dioxide emitted causing the
accelaration
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acceleration
 of global warming.
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, public funding can be used towards developing public
transport
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vehicles
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 to emit less noise,
greenhouse
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and greenhouse
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 gases and rely on alternative fuel sources
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 as electricity, which will significantly reduce
pollution
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.
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, prices for subway
fares
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 in the UK have recently skyrocketed.
Consequently
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,
people
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 are deterred from using public
transport
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 and opt to
use
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 private
vehicles
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 which
people
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 believe to be cheaper and more convenient.
As a consequence
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, more cars on the road, more
pollution
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.
Furthermore
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, lowering the ticket prices for public
transport
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 encourages travellers to
use
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 public
transport
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. If more
people
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use
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 bus and rail services,
less
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fewer
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 cars will be seen on the road, thereby decreasing traffic congestion, noise
pollution
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 and air
pollution
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. More importantly, cheap
fares
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fascilitates
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facilitate
 more
people
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 accessing
transport
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 services,
therefore
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 reducing the strain on the
use
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 of fossil fuels.
For example
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, the government in Luxembourg eliminated all public
transport
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fares
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, ultimately providing free access to its citizens.
This
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 initiative encourages the
use
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 of mass transit which contributes to a notable reduction in vehicle emissions. In summary, upgrading public
transport
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 systems will have great benefits. Not only will it improve atmospheric conditions, travelling will be cheaper and more efficient for the public to
use
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.
Although
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 it may require a huge investment, the advantages outweigh the disadvantages.

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language
Make sure to check spelling, especially for key terms like 'public' and 'facilitates'.
clarity
Ensure all ideas are developed clearly. Some points can be explained with more detail to help the reader understand better.
style
Variety in sentence structure can help keep the reader engaged. Try mixing simple and complex sentences for better flow.
example
Good use of examples to support your points, especially regarding Luxembourg.
structure
Your introduction clearly states the main idea, making it easy for the reader to follow your argument.

Your opinion

Don’t put your opinion unless you are asked to give it.

If the question asks what you think, you MUST give your opinion to get a good score.

Don’t leave your opinion until the conclusion.

Here are examples of instructions that require you to give your opinion:

...do you agree or disagree?...do you think...?...your opinion...?

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • sustainable transport
  • carbon footprint
  • mass transit
  • subsidization
  • fare reduction
  • environmental impact
  • urban planning
  • public policy
  • commuter behavior
  • infrastructural development
  • economic efficiency
  • equitable access
  • lifestyle shift
  • congestion
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