The most important aim of science should be to improve people's lives. to what extend do u agree or disagree.

Science
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should
focus
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solely on improving the quality of people’s lives. To
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I strongly disagree,
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a scientific approach can upgrade the standard of living for individuals, I believe limiting the agenda for scientific
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to
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only on humans can be detrimental in terms of productivity and curiosity in fields that concern scientific discoveries.
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scienctific
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scientific
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can upgrade people’s lives significantly
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restricting the objectives to humans’ improvement would limit the level of productivity.
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is because
science
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studies many aspects of nature and discovers problems
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numerous solutions. Some of these issues are
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found to have an impact on communities and are addressed appropriately, and others which are not
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humans are considered
as
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general knowledge.
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, placing these limitations to
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on improving
peoples’
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lives would constrict the scope of
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and
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, fewer discoveries related to non-human issues are made which gravely reduces the potential of
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in
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,
science
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should not have the concept of facilitating a better life for individuals as the primary
focus
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, but
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to document templates of
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to satisfy curious minds . It is through scientific literature that generations view the conditions or circumstances of living
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past times.
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, students at school are taught, using scientific books, how ancient civilizations would cool their food using only the wind. To the growing mind, food can not be cooled without electricity, but thanks to these documents, they are aware
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an old civilization made use of certain resources to solve
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an issue.
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, scientific departments should only be concerned about the enrichment of communities’ standard of living
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the insight
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discoveries provide.
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However
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I completely disagree as
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approach would have a negative impact on the level of aspiration and production people grow for
science
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.

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • crucial role
  • technological advancements
  • medical discoveries
  • life-changing inventions
  • innovations
  • solutions to human problems
  • enhancing quality of life
  • improvement of healthcare
  • transportation
  • communication
  • agriculture
  • energy sectors
  • eradication of diseases
  • prolongation of life expectancy
  • global challenges
  • climate change
  • overpopulation
  • food security
  • developed world
  • underprivileged communities
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