The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
The flow chart depicts the process of
instant
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producing instant
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noodles
produced
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apply
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.
Overall
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, the process
consist
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consists
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of eight main steps, beginning with the storage silos and ending with labelling
add
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and
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sealing. Notably,
the
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apply
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most steps
finished
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are finished
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by machine and
transport
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transported
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with conveyor belts.
Initially
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, flour
come
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comes
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from storage silos, they are
mix
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mixed
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with water and oil in
automatic
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an automatic
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machine, which is
then
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roll
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rolled
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into thin dough sheets. These sheets are
subsequently
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cut into
noodle
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strands and
easy
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are easy
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to cook. The
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noodle
Fix the agreement mistake
noodles
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next to
shape
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shaped
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into
the
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apply
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discs ready for packaging and
further
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processing.
However
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, the instant
noodle
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doesn't
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hasn't
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down
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been done
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yet. It still
have
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has
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considerable processes before selling. For easier to conserve
noodle
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and maintain drying whenever,
it
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they
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have to
cover
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be covered
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oil
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with oil
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in
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on
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the whole surface. And switch them into
noodle
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cups with vegetables and spices, which achieves various flavours.
Finally
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, the
noodle
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cups are
labeled
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labelled
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and sealed with the factory's production information.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words noodle with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 4 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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