The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.

The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
IELTS Writing Task Chart for The diagram below shows how instant noodles are manufactured.
The diagram illustrates the manufacturing process of instant
noodles
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.
Overall
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, the process consists of eight stages, which
starts
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start
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from
storaging
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storing
silos and
ends
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end
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at labelling and sealing. At
first,
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The
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the
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truck carries flour from the storage silos and delivers it to the
factory
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factory,
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where workers mix the flour
water
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, water
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and oil.
Then
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the mixer will be processed into dough sheets through rollers.
Next,
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it will turn to be dough strips. After that, it will be shaped
as
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into
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Use synonyms
noodles
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noodle
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discs. After
experiencing
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being
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cooking
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cooked
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by
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in
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oil and
drying
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dried
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,
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noodles
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the noodles
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discs
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apply
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are finished.
Then
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, it turns
to
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into
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package
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a package
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. workers put vegetables and spices into the cups and add the
noodles
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discs.
Also
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, each cups need to be labelled and sealed.
Finally
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, the delicious instant
noodles
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are born and will be transported to various markets.

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Conclusion: The conclusion is too long.
Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
Basic structure: Change the fourth paragraph.
Vocabulary: Replace the words noodles with synonyms.
Vocabulary: Rephrase the word "undefined" in your introduction.
Vocabulary: Only 2 basic words for charts were used.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the fourth paragraph.
Topic Vocabulary:
  • manufacturing process
  • mixing ingredients
  • dough preparation
  • sheeting
  • steaming
  • cutting techniques
  • dehydration
  • deep-frying
  • cooling system
  • packaging
  • quality control
  • production line
  • mass production
  • food preservation
  • convenience food
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