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The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.

The table and pie charts below show the number of research students in Australian universities in 2001 and 2010.Summarise the information by selecting and reporting the main features, and make comparisons where relevant.
The Provided pie chart
giving
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gives
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 information about students, who were enrolled in
the
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apply
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Australian universities. The data provided in
percent
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per cent
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. First and foremost, 38,849 total student
ware
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were
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 enrolled in 2001, in which, 5,192 Students from
another Countries
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another country
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 which was almost 3
time
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times
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 more in 2010.
Local
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The local
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 male percentage was almost
same
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the same
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 during the given time period.
In contrast
Linking Words
, local female
percent
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per cent
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 was 43 and 35 in 200l and 2010 presently.

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Common mistake: Your writing should be 150-250 words.
Basic structure: Change the second paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the third paragraph.
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Basic structure: Change the fifth paragraph.
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Vocabulary: The word "provided" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: The word "almost" was used 2 times.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the second paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the third paragraph.
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Vocabulary: Use several vocabularies to present the data in the sixth paragraph.
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