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Writing Samples
Band 5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

The issue that fewer or even no one will purchase
newspapers
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 or
books
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,
as a result
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 of
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 just read whatever they want online for
free
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 has generated considerable debate in recent years.
While
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 some
people
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 argue that they can access e-
books
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 online without buying printed ones, I partly disagree with
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 view, as it has far-reaching implications for the specific group. Being exposed
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 the environment of a fast-paced technology society, it is true that printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 are out of trend,
whereas
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 buying online tends to be more fashionable. I think,
however
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, that purchasing printed
books
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 or
newspapers
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 is
also
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 necessary. One reason is that online reading is not suitable for everyone.
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, elders may not be able to select and read online properly, as they are not familiar with the advanced online reading technology. To avoid the various types of advertising, they may prefer to buy
books
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 in bookstores or printed
newspapers
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. Another is that reading online lacks the sense of
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touch
, which is intangible.
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,
people
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 who are nostalgic may still want to go to bookshops to enjoy the feeling of reading. There is
also
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 a group of
people
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 who are fond of collecting
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 they are more likely to buy and read printed
books
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. In conclusion, I believe that it is not reasonable and feasible to assume everyone will read online without purchasing printed ones, despite their potential advantages. If
people
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 combine these two ways of reading together, I am firmly convinced that it may stimulate reading efficiency and have a deeper experience of reading.

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task response
Answer the question more directly. Say clearly how much you agree or disagree, and keep this same view through the whole essay.
task response
Add one more main idea to fully explain why printed books and papers may still stay in the future.
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Use examples that are more clear and more real. This will make your ideas stronger.
coherence cohesion
Link some ideas more smoothly. A few parts feel hard to follow because of weak grammar and word choice.
coherence cohesion
Make each body paragraph have one clear main point, then explain it step by step.
coherence cohesion
Use simple linking words well, like first, also, for example, and however.
coherence cohesion
You give a clear intro and a clear end.
coherence cohesion
Your essay has a basic structure with an intro, one body paragraph, and a conclusion.
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You answer the topic and show your own view.
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You use examples about old people, people who like bookshops, and people who collect books.
Structure your answers in logical paragraphs

The easiest way to score well on the IELTS Task 2 writing portion is to structure your writing in a solid essay format.

A strong argument essay structure can be split up into 4 paragraphs, each containing 4 sentences (except the conclusion paragraph, which only contains 3 sentences).

Stick to this essay structure:

  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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