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Band 3

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

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The widespread availability of free online
materials
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 has led to
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 decrease in printed
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
books
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,
while
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gain popularity
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, I strongly disagree that the printed
newspaper
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 or book will disappear entirely. On the one hand, nowadays, it is true that plenty of
materials
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 can be read online for free directly. Many websites and news outlets provide
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online articles and platforms to read at no cost. It is
convenience
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convenient
 to read on phones and computers without paying money
which
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, which
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led
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has led
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the phenomenon for
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to
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 many people
prefer
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preferring
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 online reading now.
On the other hand
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, printed
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 and newspapers are still important for some people. The printed
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 offer unique benefits that digital equipment cannot replicate, especially
lots of
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since many
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 readers find that printed
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 or
books
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 are more comfortable for their eyes and less distracting than screens.
Moreover
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, the printed
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 offer a different reading experience.
In addition
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, not all content is
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free online
,
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;
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 many new
books
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 or some famous
materials
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 are protected by copyright
which
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, which
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 means additional payment should be made. In conclusion,
while
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 free online reading will continue to grow in popularity, printed
books
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 and
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newspaper
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newspapers
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 will not disappear completely. There are always some people
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who dislike
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 reading on
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screens,
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that they
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which
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 remains the demand for printed
materials
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.

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Answer the question more fully. You say you strongly disagree, but you do not explain enough why print will stay in the future.
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Add one or two clear examples. For example, name groups of people who still buy print, such as old people, students, or collectors.
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Develop each main idea more. Some points are good, but they are short and need more detail.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a clear start, body, and end. Keep this simple plan.
coherence and cohesion
Use linking words more carefully. Some sentences do not join smoothly.
coherence and cohesion
Make your ideas easier to follow by using clear topic sentences at the start of each body paragraph.
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You give a clear opinion in the introduction and keep the same view in the conclusion.
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You cover both sides of the topic, which helps answer the question.
coherence and cohesion
Your essay has a basic paragraph structure with introduction, two body parts, and conclusion.
coherence and cohesion
The second body paragraph is more developed and easier to follow.
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  • Paragraph 1 - Introduction
    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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