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Writing Samples
Band 5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

With digital technology advancing, the way
people
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 access information has undergone a profound shift-free online platforms now allow instant access
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 news and
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, leading many to predict the end of printed materials. Yet
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 forecast overlooks the irreplaceable role of physical reading formats, and I firmly disagree with it. Printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 not only provide distinctive reading value but
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 meet the needs of specific groups,
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 free online content often is deficient in quality and dependability.
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 with, printed materials offer a more natural reading experience and more useful situations than e-
books
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. Unlike digital devices that require basic technical devices, paper
books
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 allow readers to easily make notes on key points, fold pages for quick reference, or switch between chapters freely, even in places with no electricity or
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 network.
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, students often choose printed textbooks to highlight formulas and write key points, avoiding interruptions(distractions) from digital errors.
Travelers
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, too, prefer paper
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 during long flights, as they don’t have to worry
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about
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device
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the device
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 of battery. More importantly, printed formats are uniquely appropriate for the elderly and young children. Many elderly
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 lack skills using digital tools, so they depend on printed
newspapers
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 to
reading
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 anytime, whether in parks or on
bus
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buses
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, where is without any
concerned
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 about Wi-Fi connection or device settings. For young kids, printed
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 avoid blue light harm and are better for
eyesight
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 protection.
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, free online content often lacks
trust worth
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,
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high quality
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 digital resources remain behind payment barriers. A recent survey has discovered
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 28% readers trust free online news, compared to 78%
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 faith in printed
newspapers
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. Meanwhile, high-grade digital
books
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 usually need more payments, but printed
books
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 are reasonably priced or
sometime
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 can free
borrow
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apply
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form
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 libraries. In conclusion, printed
newspapers
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 and
books
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 will not be replaced by free online
contents
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content
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. Their unique functions and advantages are definitely sustained demands for different
people
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. The future will
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 formats serve
its
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 irreplaceable purpose in
people
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’s reading
live
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lives
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.

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language
Fix many small grammar errors that make ideas hard to read.
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coherence
Link ideas with simple and short bridge words so the flow stays smooth.
vocabulary
Keep to easy words and short sentences to match top 100 word limit.
task response
The writer states a clear view and keeps to it.
structure
There is a good order: intro, body, and conclusion.
coherence
Transitions such as 'To begin with' and 'Finally' help flow.
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    • Sentence 1 - Background statement
    • Sentence 2 - Detailed background statement
    • Sentence 3 - Thesis
    • Sentence 4 - Outline sentence
  • Paragraph 2 - First supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 3 - Second supporting paragraph
    • Sentence 1 - Topic sentence
    • Sentence 2 - Example
    • Sentence 3 - Discussion
    • Sentence 4 - Conclusion
  • Paragraph 4 - Conclusion
    • Sentence 1 - Summary
    • Sentence 2 - Restatement of thesis
    • Sentence 3 - Prediction or recommendation

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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