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Writing Samples
Band 4.5

In the future, nobody will buy printed newspapers or books because they will be able to read everything they want online without paying. To what extent do you agree or disagree with this statement?

In the future,there is an idea that
people
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 prefer to read
electric
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books
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 rather than printed
books
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. Because they can be able to read anything they want without paying. I disagree with it. Here are two reasons for my opinion.
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 with, it is impossible for
people
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 to read everything
on line
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online
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 without paying. Even though it is
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true
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 that
people
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 can read some articles and news on
internet
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the internet
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 for free.
Becuause
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Because
 that information is not important. We can not learn anything from these articles.
People
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 still need to pay for the useful
books
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 and articles even though reading
on line
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online
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.
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, textbooks for students.
People
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 can only buy these
books
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 in physical bookstores or online bookstores. If there are relevant
e-book
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e-books
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 online,
people
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 can get the whole edition only after paying for the copyright.
Beacuse
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Because
with
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of
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 the development of
internet
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the internet
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the importantce
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importantce
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importance
 of copyright. No
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 would share their achievements in a free way. For another reason, reading printed
books
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 is a way that has no
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hence
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 there are few distractions compared with online reading. When
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 a book, they focus more on reading and often spend hours
in
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reading
unconciuously
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unconsciously
.
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 it is opposite when reading online.There are numerous notifications disrupting reading
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such
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, such
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 as express notice, the process of delivery and different
type
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types
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 of advertisements, which are easier to catch your eyes and arouse curiosity.
People
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 with low levels of self-control would quit reading and click
other
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on other
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 apps. So there is
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still
 a considerable number of
people
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keep
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who keep
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 reading printed
books
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instead
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 of reading online.

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structure
Make your main ideas clear in the first sentence of each paragraph and show how they support your view.
grammar
Fix spelling and grammar. Use full stops and capital letters correctly.
content
Give one clear example for each idea and explain why it shows your point.
conclusion
End with a short, strong sentence that restates your view.
content
Your view is clear: you disagree with the idea that online reading will take over.
example
You use examples to support your idea, like textbooks.
style
You try to use simple words to fit the task.

Include an introduction and conclusion

A conclusion is essential for IELTS writing task 2. It is more important than most people realise. You will be penalised for missing a conclusion in your IELTS essay.

The easiest paragraph to write in an essay is the conclusion paragraph. This is because the paragraph mostly contains information that has already been presented in the essay – it is just the repetition of some information written in the introduction paragraph and supporting paragraphs.

The conclusion paragraph only has 3 sentences:

  • Summary
  • Restatement of thesis
  • Prediction or recommendation

Example:

To summarize, a robotic teacher does not have the necessary disciple to properly give instructions to students and actually works to retard the ability of a student to comprehend new lessons. Therefore, it is clear that the idea of running a classroom completely by a machine cannot be supported. After thorough analysis on this subject, it is predicted that the adverse effects of the debate over technology-driven teaching will always be greater than the positive effects, and because of this, classroom teachers will never be substituted for technology.

Start your conclusion with a linking phrase. Here are some examples:

  • In conclusion
  • To conclude
  • To summarize
  • Finally
  • In a nutshell
  • In general

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Topic Vocabulary:
  • accessibility
  • convenience
  • cost-effective
  • cultural value
  • sentimental value
  • reliability
  • distracting
  • access to
  • digital devices
  • internet
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